Ideas of revising TGM Essay
There are several parts of my essay are not clear or not included. My essay is not very clear and readable, so it is really necessary to work on the organization of each paragraph and revising my language. A formal MLA format for my quotes and work cited, and a good ending sentence in each paragraph to conclude the idea. Unfortunately, the language and format could help me to gain more than 10 points that everyone should do.
Before I revise my topic sentence, I should go to think about my main idea in each paragraph and paraphrase it to a sentence in the beginning. My topic sentence should be highly related to the whole paragraph and it is also helping the reader to understand the main idea of a paragraph in this key sentence. Both of the concluding sentence and topic sentence are two main goals that I need to work on in this essay. A concluding sentence should gather all the information in that paragraph which is summarizing the key messages or ideas from the paragraph and it is always an echo with the topic sentence. Those two kinds of the sentence are really common and essential in an essay. Moreover, an ending paragraph plays an important role in the essay which I didn't have in the essay. I need to include the main ideas from each paragraph and paraphrase them into it. And also, I need to have a strong thesis statement to the style and way of analyzing the scene and the literature in my introduction. If the direction of the essay is not clear and strong, it will affect the performance of the body paragraphs and concluding paragraph. It is really obvious that a good essay should not include any part that is not correct.
I didn't separate my number of words in a proper way since I put too much attention focusing on how to analyze the story and relationship between characters. On the contrast, analyzing the acting skills is also an important part of this essay. Even though my discussion of the literature may not be true, I should always focus on the process of applying the acting skills through my comprehension to the story and the character. In addition, my introduction doesn't supply a complete background to the story instead of an analysis of the story. This situation should be avoided because we don't want to see an introduction to be very specific.
Before I revise my topic sentence, I should go to think about my main idea in each paragraph and paraphrase it to a sentence in the beginning. My topic sentence should be highly related to the whole paragraph and it is also helping the reader to understand the main idea of a paragraph in this key sentence. Both of the concluding sentence and topic sentence are two main goals that I need to work on in this essay. A concluding sentence should gather all the information in that paragraph which is summarizing the key messages or ideas from the paragraph and it is always an echo with the topic sentence. Those two kinds of the sentence are really common and essential in an essay. Moreover, an ending paragraph plays an important role in the essay which I didn't have in the essay. I need to include the main ideas from each paragraph and paraphrase them into it. And also, I need to have a strong thesis statement to the style and way of analyzing the scene and the literature in my introduction. If the direction of the essay is not clear and strong, it will affect the performance of the body paragraphs and concluding paragraph. It is really obvious that a good essay should not include any part that is not correct.
I didn't separate my number of words in a proper way since I put too much attention focusing on how to analyze the story and relationship between characters. On the contrast, analyzing the acting skills is also an important part of this essay. Even though my discussion of the literature may not be true, I should always focus on the process of applying the acting skills through my comprehension to the story and the character. In addition, my introduction doesn't supply a complete background to the story instead of an analysis of the story. This situation should be avoided because we don't want to see an introduction to be very specific.
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