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5 8 5 Samantha
4 8 5Julia

Sam has a great literature analysis in the intro and the following paragraph. To analyze a scene, she breaks it the several parts and gives me a constant feeling while I am reading it. I see the layers in the paragraph, and the texts chosen are reasonable. There are some quotes impressed me because Sam even analyzed them word by word. Also, she uses correct vocabulary but she has multiple sentence structures. Julia also has a great literature analysis. Comparing to the Sam's essay, I think she focuses on the analysis to the characters better than Sam. Also, she likes to catch the quotes which are depicting body movements. Sam uses high level vocabulary as well.

I learned a lot from them in literature analysis. In my draft I didn’t build the layers when I analyzed it, and I just followed with the time sequence. Even though I used different sentence structures, I still need to improve on the using of vocab.

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